Score: 5

"Here's some tips"

submission: Lucky(Unlucky) - Suicide

date: May 2, 2008

1. I like how the stick figures head wasn't coloured in, but when the knife skewers his head it just doesn't look good. Try coloring him in white and see if it looks a bit better.

2. Nice walk cycle, the only complaint I have there is that his back-stride didn't match up with his slow speed - but that doesn't really matter.

3. The trampoline didn't react when he hit it. Even small things like that can make a huge difference.

4. Try some dramatic music instead of waves passing by. I can see this as a big dramatic scene, followed by a record scratch when he hits the trampoline, and then maybe something even more random than a knife.

Anyway, keep practicing. Try adding some more atmosphere and length.

Score: 10

"I see what you did there."

submission: Free Sample

date: March 6, 2008

Well, your art is good - as usual - I still think you need a tablet though.

The audio wasn't bad - a bit distancey but not bad.

The only thing that could have been better is when the fat guy knocks the tray out of his hands, it just doesn't have that... KERPOW aspect to it. Add a sound effect and a blur to it maybe?

Anyway, good job. NOW MAKE MOAR.

Score: 5

"Interesting"

submission: Magic -

date: March 6, 2008

Well, I can see you're (I'm guessing) new to flash - but not all that bad. The character is... Cute, but I think you could have done more with him. A tuxedo maybe? Something to make it more... Original.

Your movement is fairly well done, the main thing that would have made this better is music and better magic effects. Instead of just yellow squiggly lines try experimenting with some blur and glow filters. As for the music, something calm and relaxing would do this great justice.